During my self review, I followed the process in the learning tool and went over my paper again. I found quite a few loopholes in my argument. For instance, why is Disney always having negative impact on children? Why is this influence is invisible but dangerous? There are also quite a few examples that are inappropriate. I also need more annotations in my essay.
I also added a few crucial citation into my essay. I found that I missed them in my previous drafts. These references can further prove my arguments in the essay as well as make it seem more academic, professional and persuasive. I am glad that I realized this problem.
Artifact1: Revised argument:
Artifact 2: Added some important citations: